..evident that this (unclear what 'this' refers to; better to write 'the profits were') was influenced You do not need to refer to the figure twice. You do not need to compare so much in the second paragraph - it makes it confusing as did the competition in Malaysia lead to the drop in Singapore profits or rebound in Hong Kong? ...it may be due to.. Do not have recommendations in the Findings. (could increase...) Link the sentences together more in the table part.
Hong Kong
According to Figure 1, profits by Mojo grew steadily from 1994 to 1997. This was due to the pre handover boom in Hong Kong. Then, they dropped dramatically from 1997 – 1999. The reason for this was because of the post handover depression. After that, they rebounded from 1999 – 2001. It is evident that this was influenced by the growth of China market
Singapore
As the findings in Figure 1 reveal that profits in Singapore increased steadily and remained constant during 1994 – 1996 while profits in Hong Kong rose sharply. One reason for this was the Singaporean taxation policy in the early 1990s. From 1996 – 2001, profits in Singapore fell from HK$50 million to HK$10 million while they dropped dramatically in Hong Kong then rebounded. This was probably due to competition from Malaysia during late 1990s.
According to Table 4, we have the following results.
Equipment
Only around a quarter of junior level staff are satisfied with equipment. One possible reason is that they need to share printers. It may lead to low efficiency. In addition, it may due to the old software of computer. It may lead to compatibility. The company could increase the amount of printers to lower the time of ques and upgrade the computer software to increase the competitive advantage.
..evident that this (unclear what 'this' refers to; better to write 'the profits were') was influenced
You do not need to refer to the figure twice.
You do not need to compare so much in the second paragraph - it makes it confusing as did the competition in Malaysia lead to the drop in Singapore profits or rebound in Hong Kong?
...it may be due to..
Do not have recommendations in the Findings. (could increase...)
Link the sentences together more in the table part.
Hong Kong
According to Figure 1, profits by Mojo grew steadily from 1994 to 1997. This was due to the pre handover boom in Hong Kong. Then, they dropped dramatically from 1997 – 1999. The reason for this was because of the post handover depression. After that, they rebounded from 1999 – 2001. It is evident that this was influenced by the growth of China market
Singapore
As the findings in Figure 1 reveal that profits in Singapore increased steadily and remained constant during 1994 – 1996 while profits in Hong Kong rose sharply. One reason for this was the Singaporean taxation policy in the early 1990s. From 1996 – 2001, profits in Singapore fell from HK$50 million to HK$10 million while they dropped dramatically in Hong Kong then rebounded. This was probably due to competition from Malaysia during late 1990s.
According to Table 4, we have the following results.
Equipment
Only around a quarter of junior level staff are satisfied with equipment. One possible reason is that they need to share printers. It may lead to low efficiency. In addition, it may due to the old software of computer. It may lead to compatibility. The company could increase the amount of printers to lower the time of ques and upgrade the computer software to increase the competitive advantage.
Office Furniture
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